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It is reasonably well-posed, and the angle is good.
The fact that it is over-exposed makes the woman, and particularly her hair, glow in high contrast to the black couch, and make a nearly perfect echo of the colors of the floor tiles. The overexposure also simplifies the model, making her appearance in some ways similar to tattoo flash art and racy pin-up airbrush illustrations I've seen.
I assume that is deliberate.
So far, so good. Now, for the criticism:
A minor complaint - the tattooist is posed in a manner that is simply not credible as a working posture - the arms are too extended, no one could do precision work for any length of time in that posture. He could have been positioned more credibly without compromising the mode's pose or degree of exposure.
The major complaints I have concern the lighting and the crop.
I think a similar degree of contrast could have been reached using a more oblique primary light source, which would have rendered better shadow-modeling.
The crop seems overly generous. The current size is 900 x 670. It would benefit from a tighter crop, losing 30-40 pixels from the top and left edges, and 60-70 pixels from the bottom and right edges. Try it and see if you find it as improved as I just did. Aside from simple visual improvement, that would also get rid of the plug problem so very many here have found so troubling.
The bulk of your gallery is actually very beautiful. There are lots of classy, tasteful and very skillfully done photographs so I think the people trashing you here are very unfair.
But this picture is ... an anomaly in an otherwise lovely gallery. The composition is clumsy, the angle is awkward, the wall makes it look like a snapshot, it's very silly to overlook the wire (suspension of belief and all that jazz) as it basically ruins the illusion of the picture. The lighting, to be brutally honest, is really awful. It's far too bright, totally wipes out details, ruins the colours and, again, makes it look like an unprofessional snapshot. Plus it's equally strong everywhere do your focus isn't drawn to anything in particular.
The actual concept of the picture is very good. The pose of the woman is sexy and provocative. She's beautiful and I love how her vibrant hair matches her heels. And the tiny blue hotpants are a perfect contrast. Her expression, bordering on the insolent, with the innocence of the lollipop is another fantastic contrast. I can't fault the female model at all. Her outfit, pose, expression and colours are all brilliant.
Although the idea of the tattoo artist being between the legs has promise, I think the twisted pose of him is slightly awkward. The light could have been dimmed on him to give a sense of anonymity or something. Futhermore, his black shirt blends in with the black couch because of that lighting (or a poor costume choice) which looks a little clumsy yet the rest of him is equally as strong in focus.
So to summarise, this picture does have potential. The idea of it is very clever and you have a lot of subtle contrasts in colours which are very clever. It's a brilliant concept, not executed very well.
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